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Twiglard

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Sarine and Beck dialogue
« on: October 15, 2017, 07:45:33 am »
The dialogue when the player character walks close to Beck and Sarine in Hathor next to the fishing rods, reads like a bad fanfic. If you cut out 3/4 of the sentences it'd sound better. Thanks.
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Styg

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Re: Sarine and Beck dialogue
« Reply #1 on: October 16, 2017, 01:57:57 pm »
why u h8 love?
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Re: Sarine and Beck dialogue
« Reply #2 on: October 19, 2017, 12:41:00 pm »
Don't listen, Styg, I thought it was beautiful.
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Twiglard

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Re: Sarine and Beck dialogue
« Reply #3 on: December 09, 2017, 09:39:31 am »
Quote from: Styg on October 16, 2017, 01:57:57 pm
why u h8 love?

Not that, just wording/quality overall.
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Re: Sarine and Beck dialogue
« Reply #4 on: December 09, 2017, 07:41:39 pm »
People complain that it's fanfic quality with some regularity.
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Twiglard

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Re: Sarine and Beck dialogue
« Reply #5 on: December 24, 2017, 06:40:00 am »
Actually after rereading it, it's the lack of cynicism that strikes me primarily. The dialogue isn't too grating on its own.
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