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micksy

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #15 on: March 16, 2013, 05:22:19 AM »
Ezra:

"As he turns around to face you immediately notice there is something off with this man."

change to

"As he turns around to face you, you immediately notice there is something off with this man."

or

"As he turns around you immediately notice there is something off with this man."

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #16 on: March 16, 2013, 05:29:23 AM »
Old Jonas:

"They were build by Omega station..."

change to

"They were built by Omega station..."

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #17 on: March 19, 2013, 04:56:39 AM »
Cloaking Device crafting recipe requires Energy Code instead of Energy Core
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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #18 on: March 20, 2013, 01:31:32 AM »
Fixed all above. Thanks a lot guys for taking the time to post this.

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #19 on: March 20, 2013, 03:23:55 AM »
Dockmaster Silas:

"He lives in a shack just north of the tavern, right new to Len's shop."

change to

"He lives in a shack just north of the tavern, right next to Len's shop."
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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #20 on: March 23, 2013, 03:29:06 AM »
Cerebral Trauma feat:
Increases the based damage of your Neural Overload...
-> base

Hypothermia feat:
Your cryokinesis and cyrostasis psi abilities...
-> cryostasis

Interloper feat:
Lowers the stealth movements speed penalty...
-> movement

Psychosis feat:
Increases critical chance of all psi abilities by 15% but also increases their psi point cost by 10%.
-> 15%, but

Sharpshooter feat:
Increases your pistols, crossbows and snipers critical damage bonus when fully focused by 50%.
-> Increases your critical damage bonus with pistols, crossbows and sniper rifles by 50% when fully focused.
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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #21 on: March 23, 2013, 04:52:00 AM »
Old Jonas dialogue:

People around these parts call them 'tunnelers' because they are known to dig wide sprawling tunnels throughout the underground, connecting remote places of the Underrial.
-> Underrail

Superstitious don't like people saying that word though; they say it can draw their attention to you.
-> Superstitious people don't like saying that

2. You mean like: faceless, faceless, faceless*
This line seems unfinished? Or is the * just supposed to be a question mark?

1. So you've me some personally?
-> met
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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #22 on: March 25, 2013, 12:37:00 AM »
When talking to Second Lieutenant Garren, the player has the following dialogue line:
(reporting the threat to the embassy)

"This guy named Abram that hands out at the tavern..."

Should be instead:

"This guy named Abram that hangs out at the tavern..."
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"The most important tool in fighting crime."

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #23 on: March 26, 2013, 12:09:46 AM »
Cave hopper meat:
"can be consumed" is repeated 2 times in the description.

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #24 on: March 26, 2013, 06:50:17 AM »
Old Jonas

- Now that's a critter you just want to steer clear off.
+ Now that's a critter you just want to steer clear of.

- Scientists call them Azure-something, because of their blue stripes, but the rest of us just calls them psi beetles or psi bugs for obvious reasons -  they can sling all kinds of psionics at you.
+ Scientists call them Azure-something, because of their blue stripes, but the rest of us just call them psi beetles or psi bugs for obvious reasons -  they can sling all kinds of psionics at you.

- If you run into two of them, you better start retreating while you can. At least they are not that fast, so you should be able to.
+ If you run into two of them, you better start retreating while you can. At least they are not that fast, so you should be able to evade them.

- From my experience it's the smaller groups or individual tunnelers that you should be most vary of. Larger groups generally leave other Underrail folk alone as long as they don't bother them.
+ From my experience it's the smaller groups or individual tunnelers that you should be most weary of. Larger groups generally leave other Underrail folk alone as long as they aren't bothered.

- Some also call them 'the Faceless' because they believe that under their huge masks they have no face. Superstitious don't like people saying that word though; they say it can draw their attention to you.
+ Some people also call them 'The Faceless Ones' because they believe that under their huge masks they have no face. Superstitious folk don't like people saying that word though; they say it can draw their attention to you.

- If you absolutely must fight them, try to get close and personal. That's when they are not comfortable with exposing their massive brains so they can sling psionics and will either try to gain some distance or will just bite you; and their bite is far less dangerous than their psionics.
+ Lots of problems in this sentence.

- You see, the weird thing is, not only do they hit you harder when they are in a group, they also start throwing crazier and crazier stuff your way the more of them joins the fight.
+ You see, the weird thing is, not only do they hit you harder when they are in a group, they also start throwing crazier and crazier stuff your way the more of them join the fight.



There are a lot of grammar errors that I didn't point out in the above. But my grammar is not much better, so I can't suggest alternatives.  :-[
« Last Edit: March 26, 2013, 07:00:05 AM by posfan12 »

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #25 on: March 28, 2013, 06:07:38 PM »
Fixed the stuff above.

Didn't change "The Faceless" to "The Faceless Ones", though. I think the former is more fitting.

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #26 on: March 31, 2013, 12:02:35 AM »
Oops. I suggested "wearily" in my last post, but that should really be "warily". They're two different words apparently.

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Some also call them 'the Faceless' because they believe that under their huge masks they have no face. Superstitious don't like people saying that word though; they say it can draw their attention to you.

I'm not sure if "they have no face" should really be "they have no faces". Might need to consult an English expert.

Also might want to change "they say it can draw their attention to you" to "they believe saying it can draw their attention to you". Again, not 100% sure.
« Last Edit: March 31, 2013, 12:07:11 AM by posfan12 »

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #27 on: April 03, 2013, 02:00:40 PM »
Sniper rifle blueprint:

The type and quality of the frame will determine the rifles's overall damage potential
--> rifle's
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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #28 on: April 17, 2013, 08:18:37 PM »
Engineering.

Harold : After that you should be able to reactivate all the outposts. I'm afraid you'll have to do that manually though.  You see, each of them has a switch that cuts off the power in a case of a hazard.

should be : cuts off the power in case of a hazard.

get rid of the 'a'

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Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« Reply #29 on: April 17, 2013, 08:32:12 PM »
Opening sequence:

Vera Hale: Almost everyone is working shifts up there now that administration level is stabilized.

maybe try: now that 'the' administration level is stabilized.
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